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Check out more QUICKIE EDITING TIPS! January 17, 2009

Filed under: blogging in black,craft,Shon Bacon — Shon @ 5:33 pm
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Come check me out at BLOGGING IN BLACK [LINK] today for some quickie editing tips.  Here’s one below:

Just a THOUGHT

Characters often “think”.

I don’t want to see him tonight, Marcia thought to herself.

I hate thinking about this, Robert thought to himself. It always ends the same way.

See a problem with the two examples above? Check out the words “to herself” and “to himself”.

When people have thoughts, no one knows about the thoughts until the people express them in dialogue. “to herself” and “to himself” are redundant; we know Marcia is thinking inwardly – to herself just as we know Robert is thinking inwardly – to himself. End with THOUGHT.

To check out other quickie editing tips, head to Blogging in Black [http://www.blogginginblack.com] and LEAVE YOUR OWN THOUGHTS!
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